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写独立的作文(系列13篇)

时间:2020-09-27

写独立的作文(系列13篇)。

写独立的作文(1)

生活,一个多么平凡的词啊。生活这个词看起来非常简单,但内行是非常丰富的。因为生活对一个人来说意味着一段漫长的人生,生活中有喜怒哀乐,有酸甜苦辣,有幸福,有困难,生活有一些人生的启迪。

“我们的生活充满阳光。”是的,生活让人感到温暖。

在六年级要升中考试将要来临时,我们正在紧张的复习。有一天,我感冒了。可我还是坚持上学,这样一来自然会得到一些同学的安慰,妈妈的照顾。在学校,同学们陪伴我,与我分担痛苦。在家里,妈妈照顾我,让我感到无比幸福。有一天,我自己站在窗前静静地想――“我这次虽然饱受疼痛的困扰,但我觉得值得,因为在这段时间里,我得到了很多,受悟到浓浓的母爱和淡淡的友谊,也知道了同学之间只有互相照顾才能友谊长存。

生活,也难免有挫折:考试不及格暗自伤心;做错事被父母指责而委屈;与同学不和而懊丧……生活就是不可能一帆风顺。然而“吃一暂,长一智”,只要能吸取教训,反而能因祸得福,得到启发。就是小小的一跤,也能摔出一个个道理来。

有一天,我和小伙伴们去游玩。在路上,我们有说有笑,嘻戏打闹。忽然,我一不小心摔倒了,膝盖流出了血,眼泪在眼眶里直转。我拼命地忍住,但那该死的泪水却不顾我的面子一涌而出。伙伴们嘲笑我,他们的笑声有的像在说我:“你怎么这么不小心。”有的在说:“这件小事就这样,真是经不起一点风吹。”有的……我想:“人家摔倒了,那么不来帮忙还嘲笑我,真不够朋友。”这时,伙伴们停止了笑声。他们一双双眼睛都期望我自己站起来。我似乎明白了他们的心思――“只是一个小小的跤,何必这样呢,自己站起来吧。”顿时,我身上的疼痛似乎消失里,我坚持地站了起来。

生活,对我而言就像在爬山一样,必须经过许多挫折。但有的人说生活就是过日子。如果你也这样想的话,生活就淡如水,平如镜,一切都是自然而然了。但是,生活其实是充满着酸甜苦辣,他牵动着你的喜怒哀乐。只要你用心体味,它还能给你很多的人生启迪呢。

写独立的作文(2)

在我们的糊口中,每个人都有自己的第一次,一个个第一次记实了我成长的夸姣时光。

在我的成长记忆里,我一直是一个十分胆小的男孩,平时我晚上造作业,觉得嘴巴很干,非常口渴,就随便地吩咐妈妈一声:“妈妈,我渴了,你给我拿杯水来!”妈妈也会忍气吞声地照办。每次睡觉之前,妈妈都会帮我把水壶拿好了放在柜子上,还会帮助我把被子和床单铺好。每次爷爷看见了,便会生气地说:“大不了啦!你妈妈天天还给你这样弄,要独立啦!像你这个年纪我都已经要去学生意了。”

独立自主是我们成长路上必需经历的难关,我们要像桃花心木一样从不确定中汲取水源,这样才能扎根于地下,假如每天靠浇水人的生长,既使不枯萎,根也会浮在地表上,不堪一击,被狂风雨一吹就倒,无法养成独立自主的好习惯。

写独立的作文(3)

生活如一本书,会有快乐的情节也会有悲伤的结局;生活似一首歌,有着欢快的音韵同样有着单调的曲调;生活若一场戏,有心潮澎湃之时,也定有悲伤难过之刻;生活像一颗百味糖,酸甜苦辣百味俱全。

生活处处是课堂,一天晚上月亮又给我上了一课。我偶然发现月亮像一个明晃晃的大玉盘,美丽极了。于是我接连好几天每天都观察月亮,越看就觉得越美,觉得它圆时是一种圆滑的美,缺时是一种俏皮的美,无论怎样都是美的。看到了皎洁明月,心想:月亮为什么如此美丽动人?我不禁这样想:它圆时,就像是人生中的甜味、辣味,也就是美好又刺激的时光;它缺时,就像是人生中的酸味、苦味,也就像是心酸、辛苦的日子。它让我明白了人生的酸甜苦辣是不可避免的否则人生将是一副不完整的图画。

当我到海边的沙滩上时,看到一丝丝细细的沙子,是那样的细小,怎么也想象不出河蚌孕育它的过程,最终把它变成一颗美丽的珍珠,珍珠告诉了我们要坚持不懈。

生活好似一只鸟,时而享受着飞翔的自由,时而忍受着铁笼的束缚;生活仿佛一场梦,有时美妙连连,有时噩梦不断;生活宛若一弯月牙,时而清晰可见,时而缥缈虚幻;生活犹如一双眼睛,有时含着一汪泪水,有时透出暖暖笑意

写独立的作文(4)

草木生长,需要阳光;生活充实,需要微笑;用微笑的姿态去面对生活,才能抖落长途跋涉后的风尘和疲惫;只有用微笑的姿态去迎接生活,才能愈合欢度岁月的刀创烈的伤口。

生活需要微笑,有了微笑,生活才能有转机。

生活犹如一片天空。时儿阴沉迷蒙。时儿晴空万里,时儿狂风骤雨,时儿白云飘飘。但只要你学会用微笑去面对,你的苍穹就会拥有艳艳娇阳,鸟语花香。

生活犹如一片洋面。偶尔,惊涛骇拍岸,浪滔天,偶尔,风平浪静,碧波流金;偶尔,肆意咆哮,兴风叠浪;偶尔,温顺恬静,款款而流,但,只要你学会用微笑去面对,你的洋面就会溢满温馨,溢满激情。

生活需要微笑,有了微笑,生活才会有奇迹。

生活犹如一盘棋。错纵复杂,步步立机,陷井重重。不防,一步踏错,就会弄得损兵折将。但,即使这样,你也不必忧郁,不必哭泣。只要你用微笑去面对,你便会突出奇兵,出奇制胜。

生活犹如一场梦。隐隐约约,虚虚实实,真真假假,不慎跌入迷幻的魔谷,就会摔得伤痕累累。但,即使这样,你也需伤心,无需丧气。只要你用微笑去面对,你便也会过得轰轰烈烈,潇潇洒洒。

生活需要微笑,有了微笑,生活才会有美丽的风景。

生活如行路。免不了风餐露宿,免不了顶风披雨,免不了“山重水复”的困惑。但,只要你敢笑着去面对,你的道路将会柳暗花明,豁然开朗。

生活如爬山,免不了身投险境,免不了磕绊摔碰,免不了血染荆棘的惨痛。但,只要你敢干笑着去面对,你的生活便会拥有“会当岭绝顶,一览众山小”的壮丽和惬意。

朋友,学会微笑,用微笑去迎接生活,你的生活将辉煌灿烂。

写独立的作文(5)

某天然保护区出台的严禁给野生动物喂食的划定看似不近人情,实则专心良苦。我想,此举旨在防止动物对“嗟来之食”过度依靠,意在培养动物独立觅食的能力。实在,在天然界,无论是被老鹰摔下悬崖才得以学会翱翔的雏鹰,仍是只有挣扎后破茧而出才能够拥有锦绣翅膀的蝴蝶,动物们无不都是在独立面对并解决困境后才得以成长从而更加强盛。

但反观人类社会,太多的孩子在亲人无微不至的“殷勤服务”下披发失了独立糊口的能力;太多的学生在老师“填鸭式”的.教授教养中披发失了独立思索的渴想。泰戈尔说:“我把花强烈热闹地放在我的心上,结果花谢了。”老师与家长对孩子的爱毋庸置疑,但恰是这种过度的关爱将原本应在广阔天地中接受风雨浸礼的“花儿们”束缚在了温室。而一旦他们所依靠倚仗的前提不再存在,那些丧失独立能力的“祖国花朵”又该如何面对烈日骄阳,冰雪冷霜?恐怕,他们难逃凋谢的命运。

当你享受着亲人朋友的卵翼不愿独立时,请不要忘了,世界是一片海,命运是风,所有的相遇与告别,不外是瞬间的波澜。那个供我们安逸的小舟总有一天会分崩离析,而我们终极只有也只能靠自己与命运的风浪搏击。正如海子所说:“我们终极都要远行,终极都要跟稚嫩的自己离别,也许路途有点艰辛,有点孤傲,但熬过了痛苦,我们才能得以成长。”尽管那段拒绝依靠,通往独立的旅途并不平坦,但唯有经历过我们才能收成成长,而这一路上的磅礴与雄伟,也定会渗入我们的骨髓,让我们自此拥有在天地间傲然挺立的根基。

用独立拥抱成长,我们需要如沈尹默所说的“统一株顶高的树并排立着,高考满分作文却并没有靠着的”魄力,亦需要“天行健,正人以发奋图强”的追求,需要如罗蒙诺索夫一般14岁就一人步行几千俄里求学的执着,亦需要像平凡女孩孟佩杰一样十几年如一日照顾瘫痪养母的责任与担当。让我们勇敢地迈出独立的步伐,在艰难困苦中体味生命在砥砺自我中收成成长。

沧溟先生在诗中写道:“你如不勇敢,谁替你坚强/你若不潜心,谁替你思惟/你若不投入,谁替你幸福/你若不振翅,谁替你翱翔。”独立使人成长,独立让人坚强,让我们做自己的毫光,在这浩渺的天地间倔强发光。

写独立的作文(6)

我们早晚要撑起家里的一片天,但是有一些与我们同龄的人却还不知道该怎样做饭,以至于在家长晚上有事情的时候非常担心,而自己在家里也是会饿肚子的。所以,我们从小就应该独立。我认为我在这一点上做得很好。

独立,指的就是有很多事情不需要家长来帮忙,自己就可以完成。上学放学,有的同学离学校很近,但上了五年级还需要家长来接送,这就是不独立的表现。我现在都是自己上学放学,不用家长来回跑,给大人们省去了很多时间,不会让他们太忙碌。

晚上爸爸妈妈加班,只有你一个人在家里,你的吃饭问题如何解决?如果家里有一些米,我可以自己做一锅米饭来吃,再用豆浆机做一碗豆浆来喝,这些都是最基本的。如果家长出去了,流自己一个人在家,可能有些同学就该不知所措了。

大家一定都学特长班,能不能做到自己来回跑呢?家长有的时候有事情或者不想去送,那么就可以自己去。我从二年级起,学架子鼓就自己一个人骑自行车去了,而且路上也用不着家长着急。回家的时候,我都是完好无损的。

大家都知道我去参加了李阳疯狂英语的集训营,一去就要在那里待上十天。可能第一天,有很多同学就开始想家,并且想放弃。在哪里,唯一可以缓解这种状况的方法,就是让自己变得独立起来。因为这样可以锻造你的独立,这可以为你以后上大学打下基础。十天下来,当你离开营地的时候,你会发现自己已经非常独立了,很多事情都已经不用爸爸妈妈来帮你操心了,这就说明——你已经是一个独立的孩子了。

独立是对你的将来有好处的,希望大家都能够变得独立起来,让家长们放下一份担忧。

写独立的作文(7)

The question of “ what is the most important subject or skill the elementary schools should teach? ” has never failed to attract attention from educators, school administrators and even politicians especially when it comes to subjects like technology, or music and art. Some argue that school should spend more time teaching technology than music and art. Personally, I am not in favor of this position based on the following reasons.

Admittedly, with the advent of internet and state-of-art gadgets like laptop, tablets, being able to use computers skillfully is being considered as a valuable quality. However, early exposure to computers and other kinds of technological products might bring lots of risks and problems to kids’ future development. Recently research by National Society of Psychiatrists shows that exposure to computers at an early age leads to addiction to computers when they grow older and obviously spending too much time in front of the computer can pose a threat to kids’ health, to be more specific, it leads to neck problems, nearsightedness, backache and even childhood obesity. Moreover, instead of getting addicted to playing on-line games and watching meaningless videos, kids should have spent more time focusing on their academic study, or even learning how to appreciate artwork or music. Indeed, spending more time learning art and music not only benefits the kids, but also it is conducive the community as whole.

First off, learning art and music at an early age helps to develop creativity and make the kids more imaginative. Actually, lots of scientific research in the psychological field shows that early exposure to art and music not only boosts academic achievement but also promotes creativity, self-confidence and school pride; kids who spend more time in learning art and music end up having higher analytical thinking and reasoning skills than kids who don’t.

Additionally, spending more time teaching kids music and art can can benefit the whole community. Music and art are a very important part of people’s lives. They are necessary for people to express their emotions, like happiness, sorrow, and even anger regardless of cultural background, ethnicity, age and even gentle. It is very urgent to spend more time teaching kids knowledge about art and music since they bring change, facilitate innovation and help to unite the community. They are the reminder of the past and maker of tomorrow, they also help to convey ideas and different perspectives. More importantly, art and music have great cultural significance, by learning art and music kids will have a strong sense of cultural identity and sense of belonging to community, eventually the traditional values and culture can be passed down to the younger generation.

To conclude, it is more advisable to spend more time teaching kids art and music than technology since not only can art and music benefit the individual kid but also it benefits the community as a whole.

A/D: People can solve important problems in their daily life on their own or with the help from families; The help from the government is not necessary.

题目大意: 人们可以自己或通过家人的帮助来解决生活中的重大问题,所以政府的帮助是没有必要的。波波建议此题目选择不同意,即认为政府的帮助还是很有必要的,思考分论点的方向使用拆分,对题目中的抽象名词 important problems 拆分具体化为环境问题和教育问题,然后分别展开。

托福独立写作题目:

Some teachers are just lecturing(speaking) on the class and students only take notes; some other teachers make their class time on discussion and projection and students sharing their ideas with their classmates. Which one do you prefer?

托福独立写作题目:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People can solve important problems in daily life on their own or with the help from families, so the help from government is not necessary.

托福写作模板及参考答案:

2016年11月13日托福独立写作范文:

In a society that changes as amazingly as ours, the role played by government in our daily life has been brought under the spotlight of mass media. Consequently, the general public and sociologists are wondering whether people can solve important problems individually or with the governmental support. Towards such a long running tug-of-war, I am inclined to claim that the help from government is necessary in the process of resolving important problems, especially in the aspects of protecting environment and addressing the disparity of educational resources.

In the first instance, consider the environmental issues. As is common sense, the deteriorating natural environment is so severe and complicated that the solution of such a problem is far beyond the reach of any individuals or families. The serious air pollution in China is a good case in point. Despite the fact that people can take some actions such as wearing masks or taking the public transportation to relieve the haze occurring frequently in the major cities of China in some degree, the problem cannot be radically solved. To illustrate, the major cause responsible for the smoggy weather is nothing but the emission of waste gas such as dust and smog from an appalling number of heavy-pollution factories. In this case, it is the government that can get rid of the fundamental cause by shutting down these plants and enacting laws or regulations to restrict their production, which can’t be achieved by any individuals.

In the second instance, the same logic goes to the educational problems. As is known to all, many school-age children in rural and remote areas are not able to receive education in school due to the lack of educational resources. According to a survey conducted by the Education Ministry in China in 2015, approximately 3 million kids in the Southwest of China didn’t have the chance to get educated on account of lacking in tables, textbooks and even spacious classrooms. When confronted with the issue mentioned above, what individuals or families can do is quite limited. Undoubtedly, only the government has the adequate financial resources and power to allocate educational resources to those places. For example, the government of China builds nearly 10,000 primary schools called Hope School in the distant places, which alleviates the disparity in educational resources between different regions to a large extent.

Judging from what has been discussed above, we can draw the conclusion that although the ability of individual or families is becoming stronger and greater than before, the help from government is of great necessity in the course of solving significant problems, especially those in the areas of education and environment.

托福独立写作范文:

Taking a panoramic picture of the entire human history, what role should government play has caused incessant debates among scholars, politicians, and even common people on the streets. Some argue that we should get rid of any form of government and spare the government red tape, thus stop bureaucrats from wasting our hard earned tax dollar, while others believe that government can maintain stability of the community, provide social welfare and prevent unlawful conducts by leveraging the judicial branch. I, personally, am in favor of the latter view, meaning that citizens do need help from the government based on the following reasons.

First off, government has the means to leverage billions of dollars and invest in infrastructures, education, and social welfare, which is beyond the power of any individuals or institutions. Think about it, the transportation that we rely on commuting from home to work, like the subway, bus, and trains need multi millions dollar to construct and maintain. The train runs through lots of states and provinces, the highway covers a large expanse encompassing different regions, and a few individuals cannot make a good decision, and it should be only possible by overall decision made by the central government. An individual or family cannot balance the interests of all the people involved. Plus, education is also another important area, in which government should play its role. Generally, the tuition of private schools are far more costly the that of the public ones, and if there are only private school, how could the kids from these underprivileged families get proper educations. So, it is obvious that we rely on government in these aspects.

Additionally, people depend on government to resist foreign invasions and provide shelter in face of catastrophic natural disasters. For example, currently, Muslim extremists organization ISIS waged a few terrorist attack in major cities around the world, which incurred numerous casualties and colossal economics loss. A few countries have decided to deploy military to fight ISIS, and such costly project cannot be made possible by just a few individual, in fact, it takes officers, intelligence personnel and staff members to work together to win the war, which cannot be gathered together without the government. The same is true for natural disasters. For example, a magnitude 8.0 earthquake hit Nepal in the first half of this years, thousands of people were left homeless since the quake destroyed basically all the housing complex and apartments. It was the government and other institutions who provide temporary camp, medication and food to these victims who were traumatized both physically and mentally. Also, these timely assistance and monetary donation would not be possible without the arrangements made by the government.

All in all, with the above careful analysis, government is indispensable for the livelihood and well-being of the people since it can provide infrastructure, education and social welfare to the people, and protect citizens when emergencies happen, like wars and natural disasters. Indeed, people do need government in lots of aspects.

托福独立写作范文:

How to raise students’ study efficiency puzzles both teachers and parents and whether to permit students to discuss or do projects during class remains a heated debate for many years. As for me, although some people may argue that group discussion can hardly be controlled, I still believe it is necessary for students to share their ideas with others and the following reasons and examples can support what I believe.

Firstly, involving group discussion or projection in the class can contribute to the deeper understanding of some complicated knowledge. To be more specific, students’ perspectives differ from a student to the other and the combination of different angles from students and their teacher can make those students more aware of the knowledge. Take a history class as an example. While learning the influence from dropping atomic bombs to stop The Second World War, students’ opinions will be diverse and then a group discussion is extremely necessary. The benefits of dropping the bomb could be obvious because the war that had lasted for a long time devastated the whole human beings and led to a huge economic slump. However, the behavior for dropping the mass destructive weapon is controversial because it left a great weakness for local ecosystem. As is known to all, the radiation caused by using nuclear weapons could not be erased and local species would suffer a lot. Apparently, after a heated discussion, students will understand the historic event more precisely and overall. As a result, permitting students to discuss during the class is highly advantageous.

Secondly, classes including group discussion or projection can be of more interests to intrigue students’ curiosity and enthusiasm. Specifically speaking, some subjects like Physics or Mathematics can be tedious and boring. Then, students can be easily distracted once teachers just give a long lecture and downplay the importance of involving students. Instead, by doing experiments and discussing, students will feel a part of the class and their study efficiency can experience a huge improvement. Gravitational law in the Physics that is complicated and not so attractive for most students can be better understood if teachers could permit students to observe a falling apple and measure the relation between the time of falling and distance. The process of exploring the truth and verifying those abstract theories is intriguing for most students. In this way, never will students lose their interests and concentration of the class.

To admit, group discussion or projection during class may generate some weaknesses. Students are too young to be self-controlled. Then, there might occur some irrelevant topics, like gossiping which NBA basketball player is worthier to gain the title of MVP when students are assigned to talk about the advantages of joining outdoor sports. However, the concern can be erased when teachers can give specific orders and supervise the whole process of discussion. For example, teachers can list several advantages and disadvantages of joining outdoor sports and require students to discuss the validity of them.

In a word, the way of teaching students with discussion and permission can be more effective and interesting. (515words)

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在我们青少年的成长历程中,势必会碰到一些危险。即使你在爸爸妈妈的精心呵护下,也得经得住糊口的考验。我的成长路途中也是如斯……

有一次暑假,我和阿姨一家去外婆家住了几天。有一次,我看到有一两个十四、五岁的少年青松地从间隔河面有两米多高的桥向下跳跃。我心里很不服气,想:“你们能跳,凭什么我不能跳。”那时候,我都忘了自己只是个十一岁的少年罢了。结果,我蹲下去感到了一丝恐惊,可是仍是绝不犹豫地跳了下去。“哇!”我大叫一声,一块坚硬的“盾牌”凭借强盛的冲力挫伤了我的右脚。整理时痛苦悲伤像利剑一样穿透了我的心。弟弟在一旁呆了,马上去叫外婆,我那时已是痛苦悲伤不已,可我仍旧顽固地爬上三楼。经由一段时间的休养后,我完全好了,又开始了快乐的糊口。

由此可见,学会生存,学会自我保护是多么重要,成长中我们需要独立,但也不可能随意冒险。否则也许下一次等待你的就是重病、骨折、甚至于死亡……

我在糊口的体验中感觉到了伤痛,从伤痛中学会了独立。所以,我们要学会生存自理、自我保护。我在此给大家一个忠告:假如你身处优胜家庭,难题都有家人大力相助,我劝你应该学学鲁滨孙在荒岛上不怕难题、独立生存的精神;假如你糊口在一般家庭,难题委曲能应付,我以为你可以加强自己的防范意识;假如你被贫困所烦扰,却在难题中学会独立,我以为你有了独立的气力和成熟的岁数,可以分担家庭的重任。无论什么时候,我们都要学会自我生存!

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既然托福独立写作是开卷考试了,那么对于审题的时候,我们如果还停留在3-5分钟,那么对于托福考试是一个时间比较紧张的考试来说,是非常浪费的。考生可以利用这段时间用来打字会更好。所以在考试中应该会出现的思维风暴、切题思路之类的,这些都是事先已经准备过的,训练过的。如果在考试中出现了你从来就没有接触到的过的题目,那么只能说明你的准备不到位,如果你在考试中,你的审题时间超过了2分钟,那么你的准备也没有到位。对于开卷考试的思考思维就是这个样子,想要考取满分并不是靠临场发挥得来的,而是做足了充分的准备而得到的。

2、如果文章质量不能保证,那么用字数来提高。

在托福写作考试中,如果考生对于题目把握不到位的话,那么就可以从数量入手。曾经我有一个朋友在考试的时候,独立写作30分钟的考试时间里写了600多字的作文,从而拿到了托福独立写作满人。当然在它的作文中肯定有一些不足和错误,但对于托福作文拿满分仍然不影响。所以在这里小站教育编辑提醒大家的是,如果在考试中不能把文章写的很漂亮,即不能写出亮点时,那么你就多写点,字数多也是亮点的一种。那么想要在考试中写出一篇文章超长的作文,那么对于打字速度就是大家在备考的时候需要着重去练习的。

3、考前提炼自己的模板。

在托福独立写作考试中,如果使用模板可以为你节约很多的时间。如果按照你的文章字数是400字来算,那么你的文章中可能会有40-50个句子。如果你把这40-50个句子都排成编号,从第1个句子到40个句子,也就是从文章的第1句话到最后1句话,你都知道要写什么,并且知道要怎么去写,甚至是每个句子你都有很漂亮的句式,这样写出来的作文还怕得不到高分吗?再比如,这40-50个句子有一半都是固定的句式,那么就形成了自己的写作套路,那么就不用担心文章写不完了。这就是托福独立写作考试中的模板的作用。大家在备考托福写作的时候,对于各种题型都创建属于自己的模板,到时只需要将观点和例子加入其中,那么你的托福作文想不拿高分都不可能了。所以平时在备考时,对于题目库的题目大家要多多的练习,并对相近或者相似的题目去进行提炼自己的模板,可以为你的托福作文大大的提分。

写独立的作文(10)

从我们在产房出生的那一刻,我们就拥有了父母的怀抱;从嗷嗷待哺,到走路,说话,再到小学、中学,父母总在身边,寸步不离。但你是否想过:你何时离开父母?高中住宿时?大学住宿时?或者工作后?成家后?这个问题也曾困扰我多时,但是,今天,7月10日,我给出了答案:就在今天,就从这一刻开始的十一天。

刚下车,清新的空气吸入鼻腔,进入肺部。我知道,那是一段崭新的旅程的`开始,迎接我的,是独立的生活。

洗衣服,做饭时对我来说,是独立生活的头等大事。做饭,自然有饭堂的人员搞定,那么,只剩下洗衣服了。

在上“语文课”之前,因为要换军服,所以先开始洗T恤和袜子。这可是一个全新的考验:我先在盆子里放洗衣粉,可以说,是往“死”里倒,可马上我就知道我错了。盆里像是装了吹泡泡的机器,泡沫四溢,桌上就不用说了。过了好一会儿,才解决掉,由于是第一次,倔强是无法避免的。所以,我带着不服气,开始了第二次考验。

一回生,二回熟。第二次,我吸取了第一次的教训,选择慢慢地倒洗衣粉,多几次倒,果然,还是有效的,泡沫正好,不多不少(至少我是这么觉得),然后,针对几个关键部位:腋下、领子、衣袖开始用牙刷刷了。不一会儿,白水变成黑水,证明了我是成功的。

但是,事情远没有那么简单,衣服用衣架一挂,就挂上去了。可袜子要怎么挂呢?我把它们就直接挂在绳子上,但一阵“微风”拂过,袜子就掉了。经过我的不懈努力,我成功地把它挂在了室内,和泳帽在一起。

白云之上,这是今天乐老师上课的主题。对啊,白云之下是我们,那白云之上呢?是高人。你要成为仙人,必须经过各种考验,独立是必不可少的。因为,云上才几个高人啊?又不能群居,独立,便十分重要。

人生,总要经历各种考验,这独立是最起码的。通过考验,才能成为“高人”。

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新托福的四个部分读、听、说、写中,两个输入性的项目——阅读和听力是相对来说常出高分的部分,而口语和写作因为是输入性的项目,所以在以往的得分上往往相对较低。但是,在这两部分中,中国学生比较好拿高分的则是写作。因为写作只要通过符合相应的评分标准,并通过自己的练习,是能够找到有适合考试的套路,从而获得高分的。尤其是独立写作,仔细来做剖析和应对的话,会发现其实要在这一部分写出高分作文来并不难。

对于写作来说,结构是影响整篇文章得分非常重要的一个因素,甚至可以说是一篇作文的门面。因为托福的改卷考官往往在批改一篇作文上只会花2-3分钟,如何在这短短几分钟的时间内给人留下深刻印象,文章结构是第一关键。应对国外考试作文,尤其是托福的写作,最简单,看似最cliché,但同时也是最经典的,就是“五段论”的结构。简而话之,就是“总分总”的结构。因为其的有用,所以常用,所以经典。而具体经典在何处并如何使用,是下文要仔细讲解的。

在正文的部分,三段是要保证的。也就是三个分论点。这里注意一个原则:可以“一点多段”,但不可“一段多点”。也就是在一个论点写完前不要引入新的论点。如果结束了就换段,保证一段的中心只有一个。如果对于一个点的论述很长,可以分成两段。另外,为什么要有三个论点?这是从文章的充实度来考虑的。托福写作可以完全不用例子,而采用全篇的议论。所以如果有三个论点会让文章看起来很平衡,能撑住整篇文章。两个太少,需要用足够的论述或是加例子才能使文章字数达到350以上;而四个论点又太多,没有足够的时间来充实每一点的话,只会一笔带过第四个点,从而会因为“论点发展不完全”而成为扣分点。这对文章来说,是致命的地雷。所以三个点很是必需。

其实有心人会发现,托福出题者本身也对三论点形式有所倾向。在写作的另一个部分——综合写作中,不论是其中的阅读还是听力,也必定提供三个理由,也就是三论点架构。由此可见,独立写作中套用三论点架构必是安全可取,甚至讨巧的结构。同时,在这三段的开头一定要有明显的连接词,如“first of all, in addition, moreover”等词来引出每一段,提示会有新的论点出现。这样的套语或是套句也都可以事先准备,每次套用。

最后是起总结作用的结尾。到了这个部分,很多考生往往时间相对来说紧张,所以也要求在平时练习的时候结尾的套句一定要准备,并且不难准备。只要再次点到全文的大观点就行,当然决不能照抄开头表达立场的那一句,完全重复一定扣分,又是地雷一枚。应该以不同的方式讲同一个话题,这也是我们常说的贯彻托福考试始终的同义替换问题。

因此,如此下来,五段论的结构不难做到,并且各段作用明显的话对整篇文章来说本身就是一个亮点。改卷考官一般看到如此清晰的结构印象分就高了,如果论点不离题,语言不犯太大错误,20+的分数一定有;而如果语言句式再出彩一些的话,25+不成问题。曾经有我的学生照此结构练习,并且每篇都套上几乎一样的开头结尾连接词,最后写作部分拿到了29分,虽然其他部分分数并不太高。并且笔者也曾在新托福考试中就用此结构拿到29分,再次实地验证其得分效率。由此可见,写作部分要想有成绩的飞跃,其实要求并不高,而投入产出率一定高。只要花一定的时间做针对性的练习,就一定会有提高。

所以陈词未必无用,经典有经典的价值,“五段论”作为托福独立写作的黄金结构,必能助考生取得高分。

为了使学生在有限的时间以最佳的状态一气呵成,临场发挥是不可取的,通过无数考生的亲身验证,我们发现即使考生英语水平非常好,写作不做任何准备去应考也是风险很大的。因此,考生务必在考试之前做好充足的准备工作。

既然要准备充足,方方面面的工作都要细究,今天要细究的内容是开头部分,我们将通过一条实例给大家讲一下首段的写作思路和段落结构。

经过一段时间的备考,很多同学对于独立写作题目涉及的话题应该是比较熟悉了,在进行首段结构讲解之前,希望大家思考这样一个问题:独立写作中所涉及的这些话题,为什么会被ETS考官选中,放在一个全球性的语言考试中呢?大家可以再回顾一下独立写作的一些题目,他们其实都有一个共同的性质,那就是它所涉及的话题和内容,都是大家熟知的,并且会引起人们的讨论的话题,也就是考生们“普遍知晓”,并能“引起讨论”。因此我们得出托福独立写作题目的两个特点:一是具有“普遍性”,二是具有“可讨论性”。

所谓“普遍性”,就是题目涉及的内容大家都熟知,例如,曾经有这样一个题目:A/D:The telephone has greater effects on people than television.题目当中的television 和telephone都是大家熟知的事物,起码对于所有托福考生来说,大家都肯定是再熟悉不过的东西了,所以这样的事物出现在题目中,是具有公平性的;

所谓“可讨论性”,就是指题目所涉及的话题有可讨论的价值,如同辩论赛的论题一样,它是可以让正反双方展开讨论的,他的观点是辩证的。

根据这两个特点,我们总结了一种开头段的结构,这个结构有三部分组成:第一部分——体现普遍性;第二部分——体现可讨论性;第三部分——得出立场或者文章打算;这里的第三部分根据大家文章行文思路的不同而进行不同的段落收尾就可以了,下面我们根据这个结构理论来进行一个题目的讲解:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To achieve successful development of a country,a government should spend more money on young children’s education(5-10) rather than on universities.

同意/不同意:为了一个国家的发展,政府应当花更多的钱在儿童教育上,而不是大学教育上。

这是一个教育类的话题,同时涉及到政府拨款的问题,涵盖两个方面的比较,一个是投资儿童教育,一个是投资大学教育。大家试着将这两个方面总结成一个事件

——the issue of how to invest in education

或者——the issue of educational investment

做完这项工作之后就可以按照三部分的结构写出开头段了。

首先要写的是普遍性:

As is often the case, the issue of educational investment is so much concerned that it has aroused a wide discussion.

此句中开头是以as引导的非限制性定语从句,as指代的是逗号后面句子中的全部内容,这件事是经常发生的情形。此句体现了问题的普遍性。然后就要体现可讨论性了,如何来体现呢,首先,出现可讨论性的前提,就是因为出现了差异,我们可以适当的过度交代一下原因,可如下叙述:

People varying in personalities as well as backgrounds tend to look at the same matter from diversified perspectives.

这句话的意思是,因为人们个性和背景方面各不相同,所以人们往往从不同的角度看待同一个问题。过度之后,进行“可讨论性“的写作:

Some people maintain that investing in primary education is a wise/an optimum option, while others hold that investing in tertiary-level education is sensible/sagacious.

将两部分人的观点进行论述,目的在于通过可讨论性的体现,将题目转化成双方面的观点。之后要做的工作就是段落收尾了,收尾之前也需要进行适当的铺垫In taking various factors into consideration, 其中take…into consideration代表“考虑”之意,相当于consider something,之后,根据行文方式的不同选择不同的收尾方式,下面给大家两中选择:

——I reckon that elementary education and high-level education are intertwined elements that are playing respective roles in the process of one’s growth.

这种收尾方式偏向中庸之道,后面的行文也多倾向于分情况讨论的思路;

——I reckon that it is the latter/former claim that makes more sense/ bears more rationality.

这种收尾方式思路方向比较确定,一般选择立论文的考生会选择。

综上我们将这篇文章整合汇总如下:

In recent years /As is often the case, the issue of educational investment is so much concerned that it has aroused a wide discussion. People varying in personalities as well as backgrounds tend to look at the same matter from diversified perspectives. Some people maintain that investing in primary education is an optimum option, while others hold that investing in tertiary-level education is sensible. In taking various factors into consideration, I reckon that elementary education and high-level education are intertwined elements that are playing respective roles in the process of one’s growth.

(I reckon that it is the latter/former claim that makes more sense / bears more rationality.)

大家可以看到,在文中多次出现初级教育和高等教育的词组,但上文却采取了不同的表达方式,primary education对应于elementary education,tertiary-leveleducation相对应于high-level education。因此,向大家强调一点是,如果在一个段落,或者一篇文章中,我们不可避免的会遇到重复意思的表达,这时候,希望大家多多积累同近义词的短语和词组,用于文章当中将会显得语言更加丰富。

许多考生在学习之初可以适当的背诵段落和词句,因为提高写作做好的方法就是临摹和套用,大家可以将上述段落中的下划线部分看做模板句式,非下划线部分可以根据题目来进行填充。下面我们利用上述模板,来练习另一道题目:

In your opinion, which one is better, to spend money on something that lasts for a long time, such as valuable jewelry, or spend your money on short term pleasure such as vacation?

首段:

As is often the case, the issue of money spending is so much concerned that it has aroused a wide discussion. People varying in personalities as well as backgrounds tend to look at the same matter from diversified perspectives. Some people maintain that spending on jewelry is a wise/ an optimum option, while others hold that spending on vacation is sensible/ sagacious. In taking various factors into consideration,I reckon that material life and spiritual enjoyment are intertwined elements that are playing respective roles in daily life.

由此,这篇文章的首段就完成了,在写作之初,建议大家多多学习范文或模板的写作,但不容忽视的是,模板性越强的段落应用性和灵活性越差,所以,在托福备考进行到一定程度时,希望大家更多地组建自己最顺手的模板段落或句型,并且多加练习,只有这样,在面临写作题目的时候,才能“临危不惧”地一气呵成。

5句话hold住托福独立写作“开头段”

第一种:开门见山式 【概括背景 + 引出话题 + 一类人观点 + 另一类人观点对比 + 个人观点】

3、一类人观点:针对题目的两个面(比如说:立场A和立场B),先给出一类人的观点(比如说:立场A)

4、另一类人观点对比:站在一类人的对立面给出相对立的观点(立场B)

5、个人观点:在相对立的两个立场中选择一个作为自己的观点(立场A / 立场B)

以下是从独立写作真题出发,向大家展示如打造开门见山式“开头段”:

① (A/D) The main role of the university professor is to educate students rather than to do research.

(概括背景)A defining character of people is the degree to which they believe that higher education plays a crucial role in a country’s development. (引出话题)One indisputable fact is that university education is closely associated with professors. (一类人观点)Some people, especially parents, believe that professors should focus on educating students. (另一类人观点对比)However, others, professors themselves in particular, argue that they ought to pay more attention to their researches. (个人观点)From my perspective, the major obligation of university professors is to teach.

② (A/D) The advice from grandparents has no use for their grandchildren because the world changed a lot during the past 50 years.

(概括背景)A defining character of people is the degree to which they are always willing to refer to others’ advice and fit in. (引出话题)One indisputable fact is that valuable advice is closely associated with experienced people like parents and grandparents. (一类人观点)Some people, especially the old, believe that it’s beneficial to turn to grandparents.(另一类人观点对比)However, others, the young in particular, argue that due to the great development of the world, their grandparents’ suggestions are not useful any more. (个人观点)From my perspective, asking for help from one’s grandparents can be a really wise choice.

此处总结为开门见山式“开头段”模板:

A defining character of people is the degree to which + 概括题目. One indisputable fact is that + 题目概括词 + is closely associated with 题目关键词. Some people, especially 具体的人, believe that + 一类人观点. However, others, 具体的人 in particular, argue that + 另一方观点. From my perspective, + 个人观点.

(NOTE:“the degree to which”在此处的功能相当于“that”,且其后所接句子的主语必须和前面的“people”一致)

第二种:娓娓道来式 【概括背景 + 引出话题 + 一类人观点 + 另一类人观点对比 + 争议句】

3、一类人观点:针对题目的两个面(比如说:立场A和立场B),先给出一类人的观点(比如说:立场A)

4、另一类人观点对比:站在一类人的对立面给出相对立的观点(立场B)

5、争议句:给出一个争议的句子,不直接表明个人观点,将之留在“论证段”或“结尾段”进行阐述或总结

以下同样从独立写作真题出发,打造娓娓道来式“开头段”:

① (A/D) Movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on young people’s behaviors.

(概括背景)A defining character of people is the degree to which they are always willing to pursue happiness. (引出话题)One indisputable fact is that one’s happiness is closely associated with daily entertainment, which can be easily offered by some technological products like movies and televisions.(一类人观点)Some people, especially the young, believe that movies and TV play a crucial role in helping them release stress.(另一类人观点对比)However, others, the parents in particular, argue that some films and TV programs have caused great negative effects on their children. (争议句)Therefore, when it comes to whether movies and televisions bring more positive or negative effects, people’s notions vary from one to another.

② (A/D) The main purpose for people who have jobs is for money rather than social status.

(概括背景)A defining character of people is the degree to which they are always willing to pursue a better life.(引出话题)One indisputable fact is that a quality live is closely associated with having a job.(一类人观点)Some people, especially the young, believe that their intention of working is to make enough money.(另一类人观点对比)However, others, old people in particular, argue that they work mainly for a high social position.(争议句)Therefore, when it comes to whether the major aim of working is for money or social position, people’s notions vary from one to another.

此处总结为娓娓道来式“开头段”模板:

A defining character of people is the degree to which + 概括题目. One indisputable fact is that + 题目概括词 + is closely associated with 题目关键词. Some people, especially 具体的人, believe that + 一类人观点. However, others, 具体的人 in particular, argue that + 另一方观点. Therefore, when it comes to whether 转述题目, people’s notions vary from one to another.

(NOTE:“the degree to which”在此处的功能相当于“that”,且其后所接句子的主语必须和前面的“people”一致)

1. Q:一定需要三大段论点理由展开来证明开头观点吗?

A:No. 中间段可以有一个论点展开,也可以拿到满分。 同学们可以参看ETS的第三版 p202页的官方范文5分和4分赏析。

A: 论点Main point Sentence+论据Details. 尽量不要突兀地写for example, 需要指明例子之前的论点句。

3. Q: 怎么展开一个中间段落才能做到评分标准5分要求呢?

A: 其实有很多方法将论点展开Details, 比如: 我强化班会重点介绍的几种: Specific personal example 少而精; General example 多而简; compare& contrast对比反差; Study &Survey 调查数据; Famous people权威名人; Quotation名言谚语; 等。

4. Q: 以上是不是每种方法都要在独立写作中间段用上?

A: 这几种方法都是平行关系, 可以挑选一种方法即可展开一个论点句。 当然, 也可以挑选其中两三种方法使得一个段落展开地非常细致。

A: 展开的Details的语言部分非常重要, 比如由电脑自动评分E-rater主要评判Grammar, Usage, Style, lexical complexity等方面。

6. Q: 独立写作的中间段是不是一定需要所谓的 “辨证式/反证式/让步式” 写法?

A: 有这种辩证式思路文章会写得更全面, 但是这不是必要的。 因为ETS的官方指南和评分标准告诉大家: 托福写作考的并不是该同学对一个观点分析有多么深刻, 主要是语言的表达和内容的清晰。

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这个星期我读完了《鲁宾逊漂流记》这本书,我最喜想说的是:“我们要像鲁宾逊一样学会独立!”你看,鲁滨逊离开故乡,去航海冒险,再孤岛上生活了28年,他是多么勇敢啊!是什么令他做到的呢?是他的独立自主的精神啊!他吃苦耐劳,没有粮食,就靠自己的双手;没有房子就自己造……一切都靠自己的双手。他没有被环境的恶劣压倒,而是自食其力,以惊人的毅力在无人的小岛上生活了28年。

读到这里,我想到了很多很多。我们这一代都是独生子女,在家里,过着“衣来伸手,饭来张口”的生活。集体旅游时,没有家长陪同,肚子饿了就只知道拿出父母早已为自己准备好的食物来吃;妈妈加班,只得自己解决晚餐——冲方便面;妈妈没时间洗碗,就把碗搁在那儿……像我们这样的一族,能生存于社会吗?如果当我们遇到困难,孤独一人时,要是拥有鲁滨逊一样的会独立生活,那么就不用只是吃方便面了 。虽然我们不可能每个人都像他那样在孤岛上锻炼自己,但生活中有许多小事都是锻炼自己的机会。如整理房间、整理书包、选购图书等等,只要从小事锻炼起,才能真正地学会独立!

要懂得锻炼自己,让自己成为独立自主、自立的人。长此以往,我相信在遇到困难,孤单一人时,你会庆幸自己拥有自立的能力!

我们在生活中不能做一个衣来伸手,饭来张口的人;应该做一个独立自主的人,做一个经得起生活的考验的人,有句俗话说的好;“庭院里驯不出千里马,温室里育不出千年松。”是呀,我们应该做一个独立自主的人,做一个无依赖的人。

战胜自我,是除去心里的卑怯;战胜自我,是抛弃心里的折磨;战胜自我,是人类思想的精华;战胜自我,是心里障碍的超越;战胜自我,是潜意识的觉醒和复活。战胜自我,是一轮朝阳的图腾与喷薄;战胜自我,你便趟过人生泥泞的沼泽,你的眼前便是坦途和开阔。

在我们现实生活中,家长教育孩子也和种树一样,对孩子不能大小事都包办代替,这样,会使孩子只知道享受,而不知道艰苦奋斗,不知道怎样去克服困难,就会锻炼不出生活的本领,就会经不起生活的考验。

我们应该学会独立自主,不依赖别人,面对生活和困难应该自己克服解决,这样才能成为生活的主人,生活的强者,才能不被社会所淘汰。记住“学会独立,战胜自我”这句话吧!只有这样,才能经得生活的考验,才能做一个独立自主,无依赖别人的人!

那件事,我至今难以忘记。

“哎!”爸爸长叹一声,彻底失望,无不伤感地说:“这盆铁树定是无药可救了,现在我也不再去理会它,就放在阳台上吧,能不能成活,看它的造化了。”我和妈妈相视而笑,叹了一口长气。

话得从上个月说起。一天,爸爸风风火火地从门外闯进,手里还抱着一盆不知名的盆景。我好奇地走上前去,问道:“这是什么树啊?”爸爸满脸得意地说:“不知道吧,这是铁树。”青葱的枝叶,煞是美丽,不过似乎太小了些,不由地疑惑地打量起爸爸这个外行“养花专家”来,小心地问:“你能养得活吗?”爸爸胸一挺,俨然一副得胜将军的姿态,说:“不仅养得活,我还要让它开花呢!”“那就等着瞧吧!”妈妈也从橱房中跑来凑趣。

从那以后,爸爸简直可以说是废寝忘食,对那棵铁树百般照顾、宠爱有加。每日回家,拔腿就往铁树那儿跑,碗也不洗,地也不扫,只知道给铁树浇水施肥。不久,妈妈便提出强烈抗议,与爸爸制定了“家务分配制度”。但爸爸做完家务后,仍我行我素,去照料他的宝贝——铁树,真是痴心不改。

然而铁树并不争气,原来青葱的枝叶此时全黄了,爸爸不禁心急如焚。一日,他打听道了偏方,调制出了一种“特效”肥料,去抢救铁树。那刺鼻的臭气真是令人作呕,我也提出抗议,可爸爸却仍不“回头是岸”……

终于有一天,铁树的枝叶开始枯萎了,蔫蔫地耸拉着。爸爸眼见自己的苦心付之东流,终于对铁树彻底失望了。从此,家中再也无人去理会那棵铁树。

雨后初晴的一天,我走上阳台,眼前突然一亮,我意外地发现铁树原来焦黄的枯叶中竟钻出了几枝细小的,嫩绿的枝芽,随风抖动,旖旎无限,忙叫了父母来看。父母看见了这几片新叶,也与我一般的惊喜。只见爸爸神色疑重,现出一副若有所悟的模样。此时,泰戈尔似的诗竟清清楚楚地浮现在我眼前:“为什么花谢了?我怀着渴切的爱把花紧紧抱在胸头,这就是花为什么谢的缘故。”原来,过分的爱反而会把你所爱地给害了。爸爸对铁树的爱不就如此吗?爸爸妈妈对我的爱不也如此吗?想到这里,我看了看父母,他们也正似有所悟地看着我。

从此以后,爸爸再没有给铁树过多的照顾,他们也没有过多地呵护我,我和铁树都很好地生长着。

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公交车对我来说是一个熟悉的词,因为在我的脑海里,我的家人经常带我坐公交车,但这次,我想坐公交车去上学。

“自己坐车是什么味道?”我在站牌等车的时候,脑子里一直在想这个问题。

这时23路车慢慢向我驶来,我就不再想这个问题,耐心准备上车。上车后,我轻轻刷了一下卡,看到了很多人。一个大叔看到我还是个背着包,汗流浃背的孩子就给我让座了。我对他说:“谢谢!”他和蔼地回答:“不客气。”一坐下就紧张起来,心跳加速,小心脏不停地跳。因为我和我妈一般坐公交什么都不用做,就在目的地下车。但是我是一个人骑的.,所以我不得不担心。我用耳朵听电台,生怕错过了,用眼睛盯着路线,生怕迷路。

这个时候是上班上学的高峰期,所以后备箱里的人越来越多,天气越来越热,天气已经到了38度的高温。

突然,一位老妇人上了公共汽车。看到她提着一个大包,我毫不犹豫的站起来,让她坐到我的座位上。当她看到我有很多东西的时候,她对我说:“小姑娘,我看到你有很多东西,你先坐下,我去找别的座位。”“没关系,有这么多人,你最好坐在这里,我一会儿就到了。于是老奶奶点点头,笑着坐下。

今天真是糟糕的一天。阳光透过天窗照进来,人的头发烫得像刚被烫过一样。天太热了,滚到全身的汗像黄豆一样滑下来,我突然变了,想起一个刚洗完桑拿,正在蒸桑拿的女孩。

当我终于到达目的地时,我感到如此放松和自豪,我不禁长长地舒了一口气——我终于到达了我的车站。

不知不觉,我高兴得手舞足蹈,欢呼雀跃。别提心里的喜悦了。我身上的每根头发都随着活动而跳动。

耶!没有妈妈的帮助,我终于可以完成一次小小的旅行了。我终于长大了,不是一个躺在妈妈怀里让妈妈担心的小女孩了。

妈妈,你放心吧,我会一点点长大的,我会独立完成比上一次更大的旅行。不是有句名言吗?

“没什么难的,只要你肯爬。”

我很自豪,这是我从小到大第一次尝试独立的滋味。这是我一生中最美好的回忆。这种锻炼人生阅历的感觉让我受益匪浅,永远不会忘记。

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